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ratherastory ([personal profile] ratherastory) wrote2011-01-10 07:36 am

Some Mad Bugger's Wall

Title: Some Mad Bugger’s Wall
Prompt/Summary: Written for [livejournal.com profile] spn_las. Sam starts receiving mysterious packages wherever he goes.
Characters: Sam, Dean, minor OCs
Rating: PG-13
Wordcount: 998
Disclaimer: I own neither Sam, Dean, nor Pink Floyd, though if I did I think this fic might have turned out veeeery differently.
Warnings: swearing, vague spoilers up to 6.11
Neurotic Author's Note #1: Written for the [livejournal.com profile] spn_las challenge, so that means no beta, no nothing, although I did revise this to within an inch of its life. Amusingly enough, the votes canceled each other out during this last challenge.
Neurotic Author's Note #2: It's the kind of fic that might have worked better as a longer story, or maybe much shorter, I don't know. I kind of like it.




“Hey, Mister, is Sam going to come back and play?”

Dean looks down at the kid, all of four years old, sporting the same mushroom-shaped haircut that all four-year-old boys seem to have, a mustard stain on his Oshkosh overalls. He’s holding up the beginnings of what looks like a truck made of Lego.

“Yeah, kid. Look, I don’t think so. We’re pretty much done here.” Dean doesn’t even know why they stopped, except that he found the receipt for the place in Sam’s pocket.

The kid sulks. “He promised he’d help me finish my truck when he was done with his project!”

Dean shrugs, looks over to where Sam is staring at the child as though they’ve maybe all lost their minds. “Sorry. Maybe another time, okay?” he heads over to Sam. “What’s that about?”

Sam shakes his head. “I don’t know,” he says softly, twisting his hands together.

~*~

The parcel is wrapped in plain butcher’s paper and tied with string. Sam pulls on the dirty white strand, snips it neatly with his pocket knife.

There’s a picture inside, neatly framed in wood. He holds it in his lap, runs his fingers over it, as though he might be able to feel the edges of the black and white engraving, but it’s a photocopy. Two angels clash above a battlefield, light bursting forth from their swords. Below them, a man lies broken and dying, one hand reaching for the sky.

Blood oozes from the picture, pooling in his lap. He blinks, and the blood is gone. Never there. There’s a note, tucked into the frame.

You slip out of your depth and out of your mind… as you claw the thin ice.

“Hey, Dean, did anyone know we were coming here?”

Dean looks up from where he’s been researching on the laptop. “No, I haven’t spoken to anyone we know since we left Bobby’s. Why?”

He shakes his head. “I don’t know.”

~*~

He keeps the contents of the first parcel at the bottom of his duffel, wrapped in a plastic bag left over from a shopping trip to the thrift store. It’s a brick, with a note taped to it with Scotch tape.

Daddy, what else did you leave for me?

It was waiting for him at the reception desk, the bored motel clerk handing it over without so much as a second glance. It’s addressed to the false name he gave, and the clerk just shrugs when he asks who left it, can’t supply any useful information about it other than that it came in the mail that morning.

The brick is brand new and rust-red. It leaves smears behind on his fingers that he can’t seem to wash out, no matter how hard he scrubs at his hands in the bathroom sink with bars of cheap soap.

~*~

“I think someone’s trying to tell me something,” he tells Dean, staring at the battered book that he’s just unwrapped.

“What? Why? What is that?”

He flips through the pages. “It’s the story of Lucifer’s fall…”

“What, like Milton?”

“No. This is… well, it’s obscure. And really accurate,” Sam flips through a few more pages. “It’s got a whole lot of the details down, from what I’ve been able to gather, from the last time Michael and Lucifer went at it. Descriptions of heaven, hell… the Axis Mundi, the whole bit.”

“So what makes you think somebody’s sending a message?”

“Why else would a book about angels turn up at our motel, addressed to me?” The book feels warm in Sam’s hands, heavier than it should. He caresses its spine, tells himself he’s imagining that there’s a hint of sulphur in the air.

“Yeah, well, they should learn to just leave you the fuck alone. You’ve paid your dues. We both have. With interest, and then some. What the hell do they want?”

Sam shakes his head. “I don’t know.”

~*~

There’s a box made of Lego waiting for them at Bobby’s when they go back, wrapped in the same brown paper. A note flutters onto the ground.

When I was a child I caught a fleeting glimpse out of the corner of my eye. I turned to look but it was gone.

Sam has always been the type to ease every individual piece of tape off his presents rather than tear the wrapping paper, but this time he demolishes the Lego box in record time. Inside, there’s a spongy toy, shaped like a human brain, and someone has carved a neat hole in it, and rolled up another note inside.

Hello, is there anybody in there?

Dean swears under his breath when they put all the notes together, and Sam looks up, startled. “What? What is it?”

Dean shakes his head, but Sam insists, and finally he looks down at his feet, his expression miserable.

“It’s Pink Floyd.”

~*~

A vast wall looms above him, bricks layered thick and high. Sam looks at the note crumpled in his palm, ink stains on his fingers. In retrospect, it seems obvious. He can hear someone calling his name from the other side of the wall. Is there anybody in there? He laughs to himself. Dean told him to leave it alone. Isn’t this where we came in?

There’s ink on Sam’s fingers, but it hardly matters now. Someone’s calling his name, and the voice is familiar and just out of reach. Just on the other side of the wall. He reaches out, scratches at a piece of the mortar he can see beginning to crumble. He pries at the bricks until his nails are cracked and his hands are bleeding. All the while he can hear Dean pleading with him to please, please leave it alone, and he can’t, he can’t because the answers are right there. He keeps scratching even as light so bright he can’t bear to look at it bleeds through the cracks.

The light behind the wall is filled with screaming.

~*~

[identity profile] asilia.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 01:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, that was actually brilliant and it gave me chills... very fitting lyrics. I'll never listen to Pink Floyd in the same way now, that's for sure!

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 07:32 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much!

One of my friends mentioned "The Wall" to me, and after that it seemed like an obvious way to go for Sam...

[identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 01:25 pm (UTC)(link)
Creepy and terrifying!

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 07:32 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks! That's pretty much what I was going for. :)

[identity profile] greeneyes-fan.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 01:31 pm (UTC)(link)
Yikes. Just yikes.

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 07:40 pm (UTC)(link)
I know, eh? I am so nervous about 6.12...

[identity profile] little-tristan.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 01:32 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow. I totally didn't see where this was going until right at the end. Brilliant, really. Poor Sam.
Edited 2011-01-10 13:32 (UTC)

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 07:51 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm glad it caught you off-guard! That was kind of the point. Poor Sam, trying so hard to tell himself that something was wrong, unable to let it go because the answers are right there if only he scratches in the right place...

[identity profile] de-nugis.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 02:15 pm (UTC)(link)
That was excellent. I love the trippy feel and the Pink Floyd and the inevitability. Poor Dean, though; having classic rock play a part in destroying his brother would just be that extra twist in the wound, wouldn't it?

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 07:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! I really enjoyed working with the trippy aspect of the fic. Pink Floyd seems pretty apt for the wall in Sam's mind, yes?

And yeah, poor Dean. The irony. :(

[identity profile] ianthe-echo.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 03:35 pm (UTC)(link)
*shivers* Creepy.

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 08:02 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! That's what I was aiming for.

[identity profile] tifaching.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 04:51 pm (UTC)(link)
I knew that one was yours.

Creepy and very, very disturbing.

Edited to add- I see that I'm out and truth be told, I'm kind of glad. It really wasn't as fun as I thought it would be and now I don't have to worry about writing for it every 10 days. Gonna be interested in seeing the feedback though, because I really didn't think this was the one that would get me booted!

[identity profile] glimmerella.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 06:30 pm (UTC)(link)
I know how you feel. :) *hug* And your story WAS awesome.

[identity profile] tifaching.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 06:58 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks, I liked yours too! I liked all of them this week, that was the problem, I never did end up deciding what story to vote for best or worst.


I'll be voting the rest of the way and really do want to see how it all turns out. There's some pretty good authors left so it should be interesting. Frankly I'm stunned to have been in it this long.

*big hug right back*

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 10:48 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm a little surprised at some of the names, including mine, but I think part of that is because a lot of people ended up defaulting at some point or another.

I kind of can't wait for this to be over, one way or another...

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 10:47 pm (UTC)(link)
Same here. I liked all the stories, so it was really hard to choose one to vote "against," you know?

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 10:43 pm (UTC)(link)
I knew that one was yours.

Yeah, it kind of has that [livejournal.com profile] ratherastory-doesn't-believe-in-using-conjunctions feel to it, doesn't it? ;)

I'm with you on this, though, that I'm going to be glad when it's over. It really wasn't as fun as I thought it would be either, and I'm honestly surprised I made it this far.

I think because there were only four stories this time around it made it really hard to pick a "worst" story, you know? They were ALL good, so I had to figure out reasons why I would pick one for that category, and I kind of felt shitty doing it because, well, I liked all the stories. Feh.

[identity profile] callistosh65.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 05:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow. Brilliant and utterly creepy..::shivers::

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 10:48 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you so much! I wonder if they'll use Pink Floyd in Show. It would make perfect sense!

[identity profile] jesseofthenorth.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 05:42 pm (UTC)(link)
Nicely done!
This has about a million sharp edges just like you'd expect it would.

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 10:54 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you so much!

That's a neat way to put it, too. :)

[identity profile] phorenice.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 06:16 pm (UTC)(link)
Very creepy. Love the eerie, disconnected atmosphere.

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 10:54 pm (UTC)(link)
*distracted by icon*

...

Oh, right. Fic. Yes. Thank you! :D

I'm really glad you liked it, and that the disconnect worked for you. :)

[identity profile] glimmerella.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 06:29 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm one of the the three who chose yours as best (shocking, right?) so you'll get my feedback eventually. In short, I thought it was original, frightening--a perfect little snack to hold us over until the 28th of January.

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 11:12 pm (UTC)(link)
I am totally shocked!

Actually, I'm really pleased that you consistently like my style. It's really flattering. :)

Is it January 28th yet?

[identity profile] sinka.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 07:09 pm (UTC)(link)
This is eerie and unsettling. I love how it seems there is no way to avoid it, and how both Sam and Dean know deep inside where they are going. The Pink Floid lyrics were a killing blow. Great job.

And poor Sammy... damn it, I still can't see a way out or a fixing for him in canon.

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 11:13 pm (UTC)(link)
I can't help but think that that wall is going to come down before the end of the season, one way or another... *wibbles* Oh, Sammy. :(

I'm glad you liked it!

[identity profile] clarity159.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 07:21 pm (UTC)(link)
*shivers* I read this during lunch and actually stopped chewing when I got to the end! Excellent concept, love the use of Pink Floyd, and sharp, concise storytelling.

I kind of wish it was longer, cause it's so good, but it works too well as a short piece.

Thanks for writing!

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 11:14 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, that's a heck of a compliment. Thank you!

[identity profile] primrose-1.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 07:36 pm (UTC)(link)
*shudder* Oh, wow, that's creepy! I agree with you- this would also be fabulous as a longer piece- you could stretch out the tension, build the mystery and toy with our minds just a little longer before smacking us with that end :)

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 11:17 pm (UTC)(link)
I agree. I could have wished for more length in which to explore/build up the creepiness factor and ratchet up the tension, but alas the challenge is 1K or less.

Glad you liked it!

[identity profile] katwoman76.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 07:51 pm (UTC)(link)
That was creepy.

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 02:26 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! That's exactly what I wanted to achieve!

[identity profile] brosedshield.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 08:18 pm (UTC)(link)
that's really really nice. And gave me chills. Awesomeness.

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 02:26 am (UTC)(link)
Excellent, I'm so glad it all worked for you. :)

[identity profile] yasminke.livejournal.com 2011-01-10 09:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Creepy and well done!

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 02:27 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! SPN is definitely good for the creepy. :)

[identity profile] yasminke.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 06:12 am (UTC)(link)
Yes but what you did with the source is also creepy.

[identity profile] harrigan.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 02:32 am (UTC)(link)
eep! Oh noes, Sam! I already can't wait for the rest of season 6 and now I'm even more anxious! Damn you!

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 02:34 am (UTC)(link)
Hah! Now everyone gets to share in my anxiety about Sam!

*clings to you*

[identity profile] cece-away.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 02:37 am (UTC)(link)
Nonononono! Leave it alone Sam. Awesome way of writing this, with all the symbolism keen to them specifically.

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 02:54 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much!

I am SO worried about the rest of Season 6...

[identity profile] cordelia-gray.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 08:39 am (UTC)(link)
Beautifully done, chilling, creepy. And the Pink Floyd lyrics are practically made for this, aren't they?

I particularly love the way things stain Sam's hands: brick dust, ink... blood maybe. Very spooky.

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 02:56 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much! The Pink Floyd seemed particularly apt, and yes, that's totally the imagery I was going for. Glad it worked!

[identity profile] reading1066.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 06:46 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow. That was nice and creepy! The last line...*shudders*

[identity profile] ratherastory.livejournal.com 2011-01-11 09:13 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much! The creep factor is definitely there in the notion of there being a wall in Sam's mind...